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There is too much direct quoting in this article. Everything should be paraphrased apart from specific phrases that can be put no other way.
The lede doesn't accurately summarize the article. For instance, it doesn't mention puzzles or any detail about the development process. More can be said about the Reception section too.
Summarize the aggregate opinion with human-friendly context, e.g.,
The game was met with very mixed reception. GameRankings and Metacritic gave it a score of 57.52% and 59 out of 100 for the PlayStation 2 version, and 55.25% and 58 out of 100 for the PSP version.
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The last section of the Reception paragraph should be split and/or reorganized. It currently deals with comparison toMyst, the game's portrayal of dementia, the lack of violence, pacing of the puzzles, and the lack of an in-game map.
A. It contains a list of all references (sources of information), presented in accordance withthe layout style guideline:
B.Reliable sources arecited inline. All content thatcould reasonably be challenged, except for plot summaries and that which summarizes cited content elsewhere in the article, must be cited no later than the end of the paragraph (or line if the content is not in prose):
The player controls a "Restorer", an individual with the ability to project himself into the mind of someone suffering from mental illness, in the hopes of restoring their memories. is copied fromhere (archived):Your role in Ether One is that of a Restorer, an individual with the ability to project himself into the mind of someone suffering from mental illness in the hopes of restoring their memories.
Ref 3a: The article states that the player isaided by mysterious alien artifacts, which reads to me as if the artifacts are from little green men type aliens. But,the source describes them asoddly alien artifacts, using alien in the sense of foreign or strange.
Ref 4a:The source doesn't mention Pinwheel, describe it as thecentral location, or discuss how its buildings encourage people to enter them.
Ref 5a:The source saysdark mines and industrial factories notindustrial mines and factories.
Ref 6b:The source says that the author returned to previous areas to attempt to fill in gaps, but that he ultimately failed, not that:Previous areas can also be returned to at a later point, to fill in gaps in puzzles. Is there a source that says that the player can return to particular areas from the hub at any point more clearly?
Ref 8a/5b:Ref 8a saysEther One packs a good 20 hours' play for the chronic underachiever., which to me means that a player can complete the story in 20 hours, notfully complete the game as the article states. Ref 5b is good.
Ref 2b: Good.
Ref 3b: Good.
Refs 3c/6c: Good.
Regarding the Development section and in particular refs 13, 15, 16, and 19: These are YouTube videos by the game developer about their history. They are used 8, 6, 1, and 7 times, respectively, or 22 times total, and appear to make up the bulk of the cites in the Development section. In all but one case, they are unaccompanied to a parallel citation to a secondary source. Moreover, there are no time stamps for any of these citations, and although this technically isn't required under GA citation rules, I don't think it's reasonable for a reviewer to spot check factual claims across almost 2 hours of video. Finally,WP:ABOUTSELF does not apply to at least ref 16. The text accompanying that cite states:The development process for Ether One was considered "quite long" for a first game. However, I don't think that the the game's developers are qualified to make that claim; they're not experts on the average length of first game development cycles.
Ref 17a: Substantiates that the game was being developed for the Oculus Rfit.
Ref 25a & b: Good.
Ref 26a & b: Good.
Refs 34 and 35: Good.
Ref 39a:Sam Prell ofJoystiq highlighted the haunting quality of the environments, comparing them to dreamscapes and favorably likening the game to the 1939 classicThe Wizard of Oz. – Thereview does compare the film toThe Wizard of Oz, but not in the context of its environment, but rather in describing the game's narrative structure.
Ref 40b:The game's portrayal of dementia was also well-received. This should be attributed, since one review can't establish that broad claim.
Ref 37:Hansen ofDestructoid praised the simulation of the condition, describing the game's approach as a reverseEternal Sunshine of the Spotless Mind.The review did compare the game toEternal Sunshine, but it did not expressly praise its simulation of dementia. The review is largely focused on game play and environment from my read.
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czar20:25, 13 December 2015 (UTC)[reply]
