I really enjoyed walking through your fragment. The poetry was mysterious, wistful, and evocative. Your color pallete is excellent, and the burnished orange and grey really gives a  sense of depth and deep time to the whole piece. Your work on custom dialogue boxes and the torch effect also do much to add to the whole piece. I did get lost in the open ended room you have in your screenshot - I think that perhaps I was supposed to be locked in to walking to the next room exit in the bottom center, but there was a gap and I got out accidentally. I wandered a bit, then figured it out. The ending, too, was excellent. I feel so bad for Hestia, who can never participate or leave. What a great experience!