Wookieepedia:Inq/Revan
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Revan[]
- Status: Former featured Article(other options are "featured article", "former featured article", and "article")
Things to do[]
- Citations needed.
- The sectioning and transitions need to be cleaned up.
- Condense BTS.
- Condensed (Ulicus 01:59, 16 March 2007 (UTC))
- Images need the correct template.
- POV issues in talent section.
- Sorted. I think (Ulicus 01:59, 16 March 2007 (UTC))
- Flowery adjectives throughout need to be cleaned out.
- Done everywhere except the KotOR section of the biography at last check. I'll rewrite it eventually (Ulicus 01:59, 16 March 2007 (UTC))
- Images need to be spaced better throughout.
- Expansion template remains on page.
- Talents section could be condensed.
- Condensed (Ulicus 01:59, 16 March 2007 (UTC))
Removal of FA status[]
- FA status removed per IRC meeting.
Keep
Remove
Comments[]
- Why?KEJ 14:19, 4 March 2007 (UTC)
- I see no reason for it either. It's a good article. -Sci fi Junkee, 4 March 2007
- Hmmm... The Revan article as it stands hasnever been featured, so it probablyshould be voted on again. The article that WAS featured was - quite frankly - an awful mess with inaccurate information thatSentry and myself pretty much rewrote and then refined over 2006. That's not to say it's perfect... but it's a lot better now than it was. As it stands, I think it should be classified as a "good article", rather than "featured" - since THIS article never has been.(Ulicus 00:48, 5 March 2007 (UTC))
- You're wrong, check the FA history, it was one of the earliest to be featured. Sorry that we're so behind here, I'll try to put up the reasons as soon as possible.Cull Tremayne 06:51, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- Question: What'sso POV about the talent section? He did all those things :P Luke's talents section is a lot more POV imo.... Righteous indignation aside, I think I had better take a lot of responsiblity for the "flowery adjectives" but... well, without them the article will just beboring. Synonyms are vital. Neither do I think that the article needs to be checked too heavily for "wankery", though itdoes have a tendency to creep in. The last I checked, everything in the biography/talents section was true. Most of it was drawn up after heavy consultation of dialogue and sound files.(Ulicus 08:17, 5 March 2007 (UTC))
- And, how do we go about making the talent section "Less bloated" exactly? There's not anything glaringly nirrelevant in there that I can see. Maybe one or two sentences tops. (Ulicus 08:31, 5 March 2007 (UTC))
- I really didn't see the prose as being problematic (there's a bit of flowery stuff like "epic duel", but it's by and large to the point). Regarding talents, I'm not sure it needs to go intothat much detail regarding each of his talents. As just a couple quick examples, "swoop racer" is longer than any of the others, and the languages and mechanical parts can probably be compressed to a sentence apiece. Basically, I don't think it needs to section off each of his talents and give a paragraph or so on each. BtS does the same basic thing, except to an even greater extent (four paragraphs on lightsaber color?). -Lord Hydronium 08:41, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- Ah, OK, regarding POV. Stuff like "Revan was a highly skilled warrior" or "Recognized as a military commander without peer" needs to be attributed. As in, "His fellow Jedi said he was..." or "Members of the Republic military, including Carth Onasi, thought he was..." and such. As it is, it comes across as the opinion of the author. -Lord Hydronium 08:47, 5 March 2007 (UTC)
- And, how do we go about making the talent section "Less bloated" exactly? There's not anything glaringly nirrelevant in there that I can see. Maybe one or two sentences tops. (Ulicus 08:31, 5 March 2007 (UTC))
Can we remove things from the "To Do" list as we do them? I'm probably going to do more stuff with this over the next week. The whole "snippy, snippy" pruning has been quite fun so far, though I think I'm going to incorporate a bit more of the BTS stuff I cut out (just not give them there own subtitles). (Ulicus 03:26, 6 March 2007 (UTC))
- To answer Ulicus, not so much. Just leave a comment under each bullet point that's done. Facetious Example:
- Mention of Revan's favorite food is missing.Atarumaster88
(Audience Chamber)- Mention of braisednerf added. (Four tildes from some other user).
Hope that helps.Atarumaster88
(Audience Chamber) 17:14, 6 March 2007 (UTC)I dislike the Revan article. It is too bland a read.Karohalva 03:38, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
Yikes, what a mess. I added the info templates to all the images, so that can be crossed off. Why's the expansion template there anyway? I don't see anything missing from the section it's in.Sarendipity(Talk to me) 04:12, 6 March 2007 (UTC)
