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Perhaps the "missing" portions could be corrupted, instead.
If the changes revert when SCP-431-1 moves then wouldn't the people who worked with the doctor re-remember him the same time the documents changed back?
Something about this bugs me - maybe it's the fact that the reality-warper is rather generic, minus the 'reversions' (cool idea, by the way). Maybe a few more details about what the warper or the doctor were like, or what might have happened to them. Maybe some small detail about how the decommissioning was planned to go. It needs a little… something.
That said, I really, REALLY like this concept, so upvoted.
It's generic because it's a means to an end. It's not the focus, Gideon is.
I see what you mean, but that doesn't excuse it. Basic rule of writing - you don't want to leave generic stuff in, especially generic characters. It makes the world of your article seem less believable, which means readers will tend to care less about the whole thing. So I'd recommend making it less generic - though of course the majority of the article should be focused on Gideon. Currently the reality warper is too obviously a placeholder.
EDIT: The edits work for me.
Reading this, I get the impression that it's nothing more than a vehicle to launch someone's "character" on the wiki. While it's notalways a bad thing to want to establish a character, itis a bad thing when that intent becomes noticeable.
i agree (surprise surprise, right) but i will refrain from voting. i'd like to see where this goes.
What? No! I've already established my character. So yeah, maybe check who wrote it first before you say it's setting up a character.
Doesn't matter who wrote it. The writing style here focuses more on emphasizing the character of gideon than an SCP article should. Sections like "blanketyblanksupercharmingcharismaticetceterablankblanketyblank" don't help to avoid that impression.
I don't get that in the slightest, Yoric… Like, at all. It could stand to be a more generic name (I said that in chat), but i don't get that at all.
Agree and agree, Dexanote. This strikes me as a pretty neat idea that needs a bit of work with the execution. Ireally like the concept, but I think it could stand a more generic name and a more fleshed-out understanding of what 431-1 does. I feel like the whole radius thing is a bit of a cop-out, like you got down the basic concept but couldn't figure out why Dr. Gideon is suddenly re-appearing everywhere, so you came up with that to explain it.
Still, overall I liked it, upvoted.
Is the name Gideon necessary in the article? You could just censor the name (or give him a generic name. Maybe label him as John Smith or something) and still have the same effect IMO. Unless there's something about this Gideon fellow I don't know about, I think that would address some of the issues a couple of people pointed out.
But when they show his real name it makes him seem more human.