Very nicely done, I laughed quietly when I read the dragon-santa part, it was so adorable xD and I really liked 'rescuing' Rudy from the female cashier xD huh, I'm so interested in the story with the Gelos. what did he mean when he said we are marked? :0 can't wait to read more <3 but before you go and write more, get well soon and rest as much as you can <3
I love it so much, You did such an amazing job (as usual <3) Dasher and Rudy are so beautiful and wholesome :D I found a few writing mistakes:
when we meet Cupid and great him (should be cautiously)
when Vixan sniffs on us and Rudolph tells him off (Rusolph sighs, crossing palms on his stomach,..)
When MC is with Rudolph (outside and getting protected by him: "Rudolph, wait— It's sacred. (I think you mean scared :) )
still with Rudolph: after the Gelos attack and Rudy protected us, he apologizes to us (it's alight, should be alright, right? :) )
when we help Rudolph with the black goo on his arm. (His gaze drops as he gives a doft nod. should that be a deft nod?)
when we help Rudolph with the stones: "What kind of limits? You press, curious. (there should be a quote at the end of the sentence.)
when Rudolph is bare and stretches: but leaf something for an imagination. (should be leave :) )
we get a few errors when we went to talk to Rudolph in the car:
Error: cannot find a closing tag for macro <<if>>
Error: child tag <<elseif>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
Error: child tag <<else>> was found outside of a call to its parent macro <<if>>
when being with Dasher at the table in the morning (it should be bowl not ball :) )
if I find more errors or mistakes I let you know :D
ah, btw. I'm German, if you ever want me to write something in German (because MC thought that the words which where mixed with the glowing symbols were written in German) you can let me know :D
