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OPR Writing Jam #11

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A jam submission

The Unexpected AllianceView project page

I clash between the Human Defense Force and the High Elf Fleets takes a drastic turn for the worse.
Submitted byJacboss83 — 1 day, 24 minutes before the deadline
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Results

CriteriaRankScore*Raw Score
Flow & Clarity#342.9293.176
Adherence to Theme#442.7663.000
Overall#452.8383.078
Concepts & Originality#472.8203.059

Ranked from17 ratings. Score is adjusted from raw score by the median number of ratings per game in the jam.

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A fun battle! It was a little bit of a slog in the middle, probably just because its very literal, tactical descriptions- but overall the writing was great and I wish we could had more personal interactions with some of the elves. Not sure if surrendering to demons is ever a better alternative than death but it sure would make an interesting sequel, haha.

I like this. Plan: Attack bad guy A. New Plan: Attack Bad guy B alongside Bad guy A

Being completely honest as this is a competition, this feels incomplete. I understand the story, but I feel there was no plan. It was just a fight with an unexpected enemy. There was no planning step and the hole battle was chaotic and impulsive, which is good for a battle, but bad for a plan. Also next time feel free to be more descriptive. How did the battle field sound? Did the guns kick like a mule or was he able to keep control? Next time feel free to give the MC a few traits of their own. It felt a little like generic solder fighting a battle, which is fine but hard to make a connection to. I was able to understand the flow of the story but being honest nothing stood out or grabbed me. Please don't take this personal and continue to write and improve. 

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Stolen Glory

Clear, concise, and tightly written.  This was a fun read that I could totally visualize as a tabletop event.

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