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Filename: scp-blank.png
Author:Aelanna,
far2
License: CC BY-SA 3.0
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I haven't written a proper article from scratch in over a year. This probably wasn't the time to try again, and I genuinely don't know if this is any good, but I hope so. Thanks to DrMoned and JorgeMtzb for last-minute crit and PoufyPoufson for slighly earlier crit, as well as reassuring me I hadn't accidentally ripped off one of their articles. Also credit to Mx_Snow, who named Avery donkey's years ago for a draft I never got round to.
Read their entries!
I liked the prose of this article and the dialouge. I do not think I got the main idea or even got close to grasping it but I do not know if I would call that a fault. I think that this deserves a lot more eyes and in a sea of over 140 contest entries I hope better readers can deconstruct this. I did really enjoy the notes that scp-a was leaving you did a wonderful job with description. +1
-temmy
This article is a wet, muddy, open wound. This article hasn't been cleaned.
It's claustrophobic, it's neglected, it's quiet intensity.
Your writing has always been so visceral for me. I am beyond ecstatic you actually ended up posting this.
Foundation personnel are to make every effort to die in conveniently accessible locations.
I kid you not, you had me from here on out. +1, emphatically
Fires rage just below the surface of the ice.
What a haunting piece. Also a very unique premise!I've seen "God is dead" and "heaven is empty" stories before, but not one where God is in the process of dying and heaven is emptying in real time. It also hassuch an intriguing sense of mystery that feels right at home with the biblical elements it uses. The atmosphere is heavy, and it strikes a very particular fear of the unknown: the unknown of the future. Really great.
[blackboxed stuff]
Hmm. Interesting. It's funny, I knew exactly what I was talking about when I wrote this, but I never quite figured out in my head how it manifested in a more literal, and a more Watsonian sense. Thanks for putting it into words, and for your own kind words.
I think this may be obfuscated abit to much for my taste, but such is the nature of DoA articles. That said for what I lose in "not totally getting it", it's made up for with deeply visceral and upsetting imagery. +1
I really like this
I don't see the need for a DoA reference. this would do well without that, to the point I think it takes away from the article.
Additionally, I take issue with a note from the author in a footnote apparently in the actual file… I think it just shouldn't be in there and is tonally incompatible with the rest of the article which serves as a distraction. Breaking the fourth wall to make a slightly snarky statement about what sorta article this is, just doesn't belong in such a bleak and claustrophobic article imo.
That isn't enough to overwhelm the excellently creepy vibes and the interesting dialogue. So +1 but consider taking out the footnote at the very least.
Thanks very much!
To be perfectly honest, I'm amazed I got away with the things you pointed out as long as I did. I included the DoA reference as a slight throwback; a lot of the more recent articles are focused on the references to older articles as a theme, whereas I always appreciated the use of it to remind the Foundation of things they've done that they'd rather forget, as inStained and (according to the author)Site-5, which I felt was appropriate to this article. The footnote… yeah, I can't really defend that. I worried that people would see DoA and go into this as a puzzle to be solved, which absolutely is not what it's intended to be, and wanted to head that off early, but I appreciate it's a tad glib for the surroundings. I'd like to keep the DoA reference, but if the footnote bothers anyone else I'll cheerfully part with it.
Thanks again for reading!
For the record…
Foundation personnel are to make every effort to die in conveniently accessible locations. This is not a central tenet, but is considered common courtesy…
This has unironically one of the best ConProcs I've yet seen on this site, amazing. The rest is great too, don't get me wrong (especially the -A quasi-poetry and the whole image bit); but man what a hook this starts out the gate with with, and then really just never lets go
This is one of those articles where I don't feel properly equipped to praise it the way it deserves.
Every part of it felt right. Every part of it felt disgusting and cloying and visceral and irresistible. Absolutely superb work and definitely one of my favourite 8K pieces so far.
I must admit the first footnote took me a little bit out of it, but equally I do understand why it's there, and it does somehow suit the surreal, personal vibe of the piece. I'm not certain how I feel about it's inclusion, but I think if any article could pull off something like that it would be this one.