Wikipedia:The Core Contest/Entries/AprilMay2022 archive
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Below are the submissions for the April/May 2022 running of the Core Contest
TL;DR: More analysis of the article's present state |
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Aside from the sections I worked on in 2017, the article is largely uncited. Many of the refs used outside those sections are not the kind of "survey written by an actual academic aimed at intelligent undergraduates" works that most of the citations for an article like this should be (I see popular history, generalist tertiary sources, and extremely specific academic articles on niche topics, all of which should probably not be there; thankfully nothing horribly outdated and no excessive primary sourcing). Images could do with some thought – do we need nineteen(!) (twenty if you count the one in the navigational sidebar) separate maps, more than every other kind of image put together? Other sections can probably be cut – is a chronology section doing anything other than duplicating what is in, or should be in, the sections on either historiography or history? Is the long list of "empires, kingdoms, and regions" (I believe new since my 2017 efforts!) useful, or should everything in it that's relevant to a survey of the entirety of ancient Greece be covered in the sections on history, geography, and political organisation? Women are mentioned in the text exactly once. There's surely more to be said of the post-Roman history of Greece than the couple of sentences it currently gets. The lead defines the scope of the article as including the Greek dark ages, but they're barely mentioned in the body. The discussion of art spends more words on Greco-Buddhist art than it does on Greco-Roman, and doesn't mention pottery or vase painting at all. The section on economy doesn't discuss things like agriculture, Mediterranean trade, or the development of coinage. |
Progress, May 27I haven't had as much time as I would have liked to work on this article. Between working full time and being part of a musical which had two weekends of performances, I've only been able to dedicate an hour or two to this article. I won't be winning the contest, but I've made improvements to a very important article, which is more important than winning to me. I will hopefully get a bit more done this weekend. As of now, improvements include:
* Nominator:CactiStaccingCrane (talk ·contribs)