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Nominator:Locust member (talk ·contribs)01:21, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Reviewer:Vestrian24Bio (talk·contribs)12:00, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
Hi! I will be reviewing this article, expect the initial remarks soon!Vestrian24Bio12:00, 29 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
@Locust member:
- EARWIG shows 27.0% - violations unlikely.
- According tolink-dispenser - all good.
- References are looking good.
- Specify language variant
Done
- Swift and Springsteen's image should be place adjacent to the third paragraph.
- Done
- In the hatnote use,
{{for|other uses}}.- Done
- There's a disambiguation link in the fourth note.
- Didn't the song chart anywhere? and didn't it receive any nominations?
- The second and third paragraphs of the lead should be merged and shortened to be summary of the article.
- Done, see below.
- What happened to the Personnels section..
- There is only information on the producer (Cain) and songwriters (Cain and Colyer). There would be no point for a personnel section when that information could be included in prose.
- "Background and recording" and "Release" should be separate sections.
Not done No point in having such a sort section. Typically, when there is not much to say about the release section, it can be added to Background.
- "Release" section should come after "Music and lyrics" section.
- "Critical response" section should be "Critical reception" section.
- How come? The heading is "Reception", so its the critical response of the reception. Seen at articles such asFetch the Bolt Cutters
- Format the last part as following,
== References ===== Notes ==={{notelist}}=== Citations ==={{reflist}}Vestrian24Bio13:30, 30 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- Done
- Add alt text for the images.
- Done
- Lead should be of three paragraphs,
- Basic information about the song.
- Summary of critical reception and commercial performance.
- Details about Music video and live performances.
- Done
- "Release" section should be of -
- ""American Teenager" was released as the third and final single from the album on April 21, through her record label Daughters of Cain. It was released alongside a visualizer, which depicts Cain sitting on a picnic table, drinking cans of Budweiser, and appearing tired on a sunny day. Alongside the release of the single, she also announced the Freezer Bride Tour and revealed its North American dates for July 2022.[5]"
- According to the infobox the song was written by 'Hayden Silas Anhedönia and Steven Mark Colyer', but the background section says otherwise.
- The entire third paragraph of the "Music and lyrics" along with Swift and Springsteen's images should be moved to "Critical reception".
- How come? This is talking about the actual composition / sound of the song itself, not critiquing the music.
- Isn't there a newer image for Springsteen..
- Done
- "Year-end lists" should be a separate sub-section in a table similar tothis.
- Done You can change its placement if you would like.Locust member (talk)16:05, 1 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- @Locust member: Now that it's in the table, is it necessary to mention it again in the prose...Vestrian24Bio12:00, 2 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- I still have them mentioned in prose.Locust member (talk)13:30, 2 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- Sorry I misread your reply. I do think it is necessary, take a look at GAMy Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy.Locust member (talk)15:06, 2 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- In that case the paragraph should be placed before the table in the "Year-end rankings" section. Just like inMy Beautiful Dark Twisted Fantasy.Vestrian24Bio10:09, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- Done also, I changed it back to just "rankings" since it also includes mid-decade lists and other lists.Locust member (talk)21:47, 3 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- Check author info on ref 15, 27, 38 and 42.
- Done; 38 was already good to go, though.
- Following should be in the "Live performances" section.
- "The song was included on the pre-show playlist for Swift's the Eras Tour (2023–2024).[57] On January 19, 2024, American singer-songwriter Gracie Abrams covered "American Teenager" at the Sydney concert of her Good Riddance Tour.[58] The following month, Abrams recorded a cover version of the song for the Australian radio station Triple J. Following its release, Abrams showed admiration for Cain; she described the song as "amazing" and stated that she is a "fan of [Cain's] writing" and listens to Cain's music often.[59]"
- Not done - Inclusion in a playlist is not a performance, and a cover version from another artist doesn't seem like one either.
- "Music video" and "Live performances" should be separate sections.
- How come? Both are so short; both can be combined if there is not enough information for them each to have their own section.
- No need for a ref on image caption.
- Done
- What's a "a longer intro"?
- The video contains an extended intro to the song; a longer intro.
@Locust member: that's all.Vestrian24Bio09:47, 31 January 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- I addressed some critiques and left a comment on others.Locust member (talk)03:34, 1 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- I have left my comments above.Vestrian24Bio08:23, 1 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
- Responded to them!Locust member (talk)16:07, 1 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
All else good, passing for GA.Vestrian24Bio02:54, 4 February 2025 (UTC)[reply]
The discussion above is closed.Please do not modify it. Subsequent comments should be made on the appropriate discussion page. No further edits should be made to this discussion.
